wtorek, 29 grudnia 2015
Mr Bean
Mr Bean had to go to the hospital becouse his hand had got stuck in a kettle. In a waiting room he had noticed that there were only one free chair left and an old man wanted to sit there so Mr Bean dashed to the seat to take it. Then he saw a woman all in bandages who was sitting next to him so he started to stretch his arms and legs to make fun of her. He noticed that she had a number about 30 before his therefore he swapped the numbers and pretend that he was talking with her so the nurse didn't noticed anything. Next he saw a kid with a pot on his head so he wrote 0 on his number to change it from 85 to 850. Later he figured out that his number - 52 is a reflection of the number 25 which was supposed to be next therefore he turn the monitor upside down. Unfortunately the woman whose number he had stolen stopped him and the nurse turn monitor back to normal. He fell asleep and he dropped the number so the woman he had been having laugh at "told" the nurse that this it was here's. When he woke up he realized that he lost his chance and he went for another number.
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The story reads well and I am really happy that you managed to use most of the tenses correctly (including the Past Perfect).
OdpowiedzUsuńAvoid silly mistakes such as "didn't noticed"!
"he had been having laugh at" is wrong --> it shouls be "he had been laughing at"
Hi Bartek!
OdpowiedzUsuńOur class got a task to write a review of random person's blog. I am supposed to comment on Bartek's blog. Let's take a closer look at your hard work in first term.
First of all, your posts are shorter than I expected. You should try to write more than 150 words so you can easier pass your matura exam in the near future. In my opinion it would help you. Your shorter posts aren't as interesting as the longer ones.
You made a few grammar mistakes but the last post (Mr. Bean) surprised me. It looks like you know how to use tenses properly but you are too lazy to stop and think.
These are your main problems but we can also look at every post individually, don't we? ;)
Our first task was to comment on a video about top 10 commercials. I will look at your opinion about a good commercial first. You figured out advantages of good commercials but you didn't explain them- it would make me more interested in your opinion. You don't read what you have just written. For instance you used world "archive" instead of "achieve".
Let's move on to the "Inception- Review". You keep forgeting about "s" at the and of verbs. You wrote that Leonardo di Caprio played realistic. I missed the explanation when I read your post.
We had two homework tasks about "Tootsie". There are again some grammar mistakes but I think that I have already done a few of them in this post. :P First post is short but I can guess that this homework was a challenge for you.
I enjoyed reading posts about Mr. Bean and handwriting. They show that if you want, you can. As I mentioned before Mr. Bean one surprised me. You used more than one tense so reading the text was a real pleasure.
To sum up, your blog is well-written although some texts are short. You improved your writing skills. Take your very first post and one about Mr. Bean. I think that I will follow your blog as I enjoyed it. If you write posts like the last one, you will probably be one of the best writers in our class.